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noylj posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2017 1:28am for Survivors

This is a really great story. Wish there was a lot more screwing with Bumblemore and a whole lot less angst, but that's me.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 16th January 2013 10:34pm for Survivors

Outstanding story so far.

gunny

Davy posted a comment on Monday 1st August 2011 4:35am for Survivors

the line of bull that Harry gave Dumbledore about coming from the future where Daphne and Luna led a resistance. What story is that from?

Glacialis1 posted a comment on Saturday 13th March 2010 2:02am for Survivors

I am interested to see where this goes. Have you posted this before elsewhere? I swear I have read at least the first part of this story somewhere else. I think you pegged Luna perfectly in the chapter about obliviating herself to continue the hunt, and thinking she may have done it before. Good Show!

LifeScientist posted a comment on Wednesday 10th March 2010 10:14pm for Survivors

I liked this a lot the first time I read it and it hasn't lost any of its magic in the rereading. Looking forward to the next chapters whenever you have them ready.
Matt

Entilzah posted a comment on Wednesday 10th March 2010 12:35pm for Survivors

Ah yes... your Piece de Resistance makes it to FFA. And a reworked verson as well. Hooray!

I always thought the best thing about this one was the relationship between Neville and Harry. What we all hoped Ron and Harry would become. At ease with each other, having nothing to prove to the other, and best friends to the end. You could have written something with no plot whatsoever and that friendship and I would have loved it!

And yes, you did write a good story with a good plot!

00_Knight posted a comment on Wednesday 10th March 2010 6:01am for Survivors

Way to make a killer cliffhanger!

I like where this story is headed, and can't wait for the next part! The scene with Fred becoming a veela in heat and George kissing him, classic!

Sterling posted a comment on Wednesday 10th March 2010 1:08am for Survivors

This is a well written chapter. Not enough backstory or plot yet for me to comment on it much more then that. But you do well with dialogue, giving each character a distinct voice and engaging interactions.

Alex Austin posted a comment on Wednesday 10th March 2010 12:45am for Survivors

Interesting start - I can't wait to read more.

dan26 posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 11:31pm for Survivors

Interesting to consider the story that is. But the unique question is Can Harry be a good date?

Fresh posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 11:17pm for Survivors

Fantastic! I've been reading a lot of your work lately and I think I'm hooked. :)

LynnTerald posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 1:31pm for Survivors

Well, this a remarably different Harry Potter fic. I was planning on going to sleep, but it caught my interest and I just had to finish it. Good job. I look forward to reading more of it.

DrT posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 5:48am for Survivors

Yes, this does seem a little different than the version I read; certainly it's a good story!

Robert Owen posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 2:33am for Survivors

Excellent story with some very nice twists. One thing I did notice is that some of the dates are off. Looking forward to the next installment :)

Bob Officer posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 12:37am for Survivors

A cliffie! Wow.

What next. I love this story, so far.

william deckart posted a comment on Tuesday 9th March 2010 12:11am for Survivors

D. Musings, celebrated author,

I must say that this was one of the best "Marriage Contract" stories out there that I've read.

The depth in this story is just astounding, and you'll forgive me for dissecting a scene, but the scene with Hermione and Harry in the common room during Gryffindor Quidditch practice cleared up a few questions I had about how the Weasley's were going against Harry. That Ginny is a "vindictive little bitch" seemed quite realistic to myself.

Switching the Gryff-Slyth stereotypes really pulled me into your story, " He was deeply in love with a girl who turned out to be the way you are supposed to be, but aren't." Wow, just wow, I've never heard it put that way before and I commend you on your writing skills. You truly are a FanFicAuthor.

W. Deckart, delighted reader.

Manatheron posted a comment on Monday 8th March 2010 9:53pm for Survivors

you know, I'm quite certain I've read this story word for word elsewhere. is there a link to your FFN account I could possibly have? just to verify that someone hasn't ripped your works off?

Trscroggs posted a comment on Monday 8th March 2010 9:21pm for Survivors

I remember this story. I enjoyed it a great deal. I thought using other stories, or the basis of them, for Harry's lies to Dumbeldore was a great and funny idea.

I'm very glad to see it here, as sometimes I have serious problems using the Cher Azcaban group to find complete pieces of stories.

MartinEB72 posted a comment on Monday 8th March 2010 6:56pm for Survivors

Is this just going to be a reprint of your story from fanfiction.net? Or are you going to change it? You should mark it a a repost if it is.

Cyborg posted a comment on Monday 8th March 2010 6:20pm for Survivors

great first chapter. I must say, however, that the gap you've tried to create between Harry and Ron and Hermione is not a very strong one. I think that Ron would go against his mother in favor of Harry... and Hermione certainly would if he didn't.

It's just a small thing on character development. Feel free to leave it as it is. Otherwise, your characterization is clear and flowing.

I noticed a few Americanisms in their dialogue as well, such as "sweet" that detracted from the story. Once again, personal taste.

Great story so far! Update soon!