Muad'Dib posted a comment on Friday 11th June 2010 3:49pm for Goodbye My Love

I think you didn't read google properly when you were searching for a well know cemetary in Bristol, mate. It's actually Arno's Vale, not Amos Vale.

Clell65619 replied:

Actually, it's a misremembering on my part. I attended a funeral there in '78 for a cousin of my then fiance, now wife.

00_Knight posted a comment on Thursday 10th June 2010 4:58am for Goodbye My Love

Hmmmm..... Interesting and could have potential, if you'd decide to do it.

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 7th March 2010 2:50am for Goodbye My Love

This is sad. I'm sorry that Harry is mourning again. Thank you for a nice little interlude I'm sorry it is sad and Harry has to fight again. pms

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 11:17pm for Goodbye My Love

Yes, you can most definitely smell and feel the angst. Voldemort is going to find out that there's Hell to pay for what happened and Harry, and friends, will take payment in like coin. I rather suspect that Tom has no real idea of just how much whup-ass Harry can, and will, bring down on them. It will b e instructive to the rest of the wizarding world.

AngelQueen posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 11:58am for Goodbye My Love

*wibbles* Poor Harry! :(

I do like that last line, though! Heh, people had better stay out of the way, because I have a feeling that once Harry gets into his anger stage of grief, he isn't going to care much who he rips apart. If Dumbledore or his Order of the Burnt Chicken gets in the way of him going after Tommy 'I have Daddy Issues and I'm Taking Them Out on the World' Riddle, well, they won't be in his way for long.

Great AU moment! I also get the feeling that Parvati isn't going to sit by for long. She wants justice and revenge for her sister too. Good job! :)

Dale Dietzman posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 11:25am for Goodbye My Love

So-o-o-o-o, just WHY should Harry NOT kill the evil ones who kill without mercy, without restraint, without remorse???? HARRY IS NOT DUMBLES.

NOT being willing to kill, when killing is needed, is Dumbels failing, and he makes others pay for his mercy with their pain and their blood, because HE can't stomach doing what is necessary.

Voldie and Co. have declared WAR, and in War soldiers don't "make arrests". They make corpses, because corpses don't get up and shoot you in the back. Neither do they get broken out of prison to kill again.

Clell65619 replied:

- No, Harry isn't Dumbledore, but he is the son of Tony Stark.

- The Marvels have killed on occasion, but only as a very last resort. this is the culture that Harry has been brought up in and the one he believes to be 'right'. If the scene shown in this short happened in story, then Harry would go Dark Lord hunting and come home with a pelt. I've got an idea or two for dealing with Tom that doesn't require Harry to kill. Having access to the allies that Harry will have is going to be a big help.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 5:53am for Goodbye My Love

> It has been pointed out to me that I sometimes have horrible things happen to Harry's girlfriends. I'm trying to stop doing that.
If you're doing that because you want to change, then good. Don't change cuz the readers ask.

Everyone has their own thing. If this works for you and you want to continue to do it this way, then continue.

I'll stop before the rambling becomes incomprehensible.

This chapter: Yep, angst is just oozing out of it. Which is, of course, the point. Even for being so short, it still managed a lot of emotional impact.

Clell65619 replied:

- It wasn't so much I wanted to or not, it's that I wasn't aware that it had become a minor theme of my stories. I was made aware of it when a review asked 'What horrible thing are you going to do to Hermione this time?'

morriganscrow posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 5:35am for Goodbye My Love

That was beautifully written. Not maudlin, nor angsty (in a goffick/oh woe sense) nor drenched in purple prose. It was a clean, clear snapshot of grief and the approaching stormfront of righteous, freezing rage.
Excellent job getting the balance just right.

jgkitarel posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 2:09am for Goodbye My Love

Considering Harry's state of mind, I think Tony will give him a bye on a murder spree, as long as they're Death Eaters.

Though I find that you have Harry not killing in the actual Technomage story to be a bit fitting.

There are worse things than killing someone. Killing them means you simply want them dead, no matter how long it takes or how painful it is. The Marvelverse heroes are proponents of a sort of poetic justice, and you don't get that by simply killing off your enemies.

Even the best of them aren't that merciful at times.

Clell65619 replied:

- Well considering what Tony did on the Skrull homeworld...

- There are so many ways to abuse Tom using the Marvel Universe that killing him isn't really necessary

Eric_Von_Nesslau posted a comment on Friday 5th March 2010 12:08am for Goodbye My Love

Death Eaters are going to be full up after this one....

dan26 posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 8:14pm for Goodbye My Love

Oh dear this should be interesting but I belive that this isn't a bad story

dwilken posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 7:05pm for Goodbye My Love

Feeling a bit morose when you wrote this? Nicely done, but....

Clell65619 replied:

- No, not really. As I said in the A/N, I was looking for a way to drive Harry to the point where he will kill. Based on pre-reader reaction I decided to take the story in a fuzzier direction. Harry isn't going to kill, but many people will wish he had. But that's seventh year and the story is only up to midway through the second.

NWL posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 6:47pm for Goodbye My Love

I liked what I saw - a lot - though the comments attached to the story left me with a question for you.

Almost every writer has what I call a "wombat place". I call it this after a colleague; every work he would write, even if it was meant to be dark or serious, would always end up in comedy within about 5-6 chapters. When things got silly, the wombats would come out. Thus, the story had gone to the wombat place.

The point of a wombat place is this: the story may start out quite different, but - unless they consciously try to avoid it - drifts over the course of chapters starts to drift to a certain point in a person's psyche. Some, like my old colleague, went to comedy; others, like myself, tended to go toward darker endings.

So... my question to you, given your issues with the original planned end of Technomage. What is your 'wombat place'? And what do you think about it?

Clell65619 replied:

- My writing is a fairly organic thing. When the actors start ad libbing in my head, when my prereaders make suggestions or point out my idiocy, the story mutates. I always start a new story with an outline. The outline rarely survives intact past the fifth chapter.

- Technomage is on it's seventh outline.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:56pm for Goodbye My Love

It sad that Harry lost a close friend, I am surprise that Parvati Mum and Dad have forbidden her to spend time with her friends. I think that Harry is big part of why Parvati is forbidden, but I don't think that the Patil are trying to protect Parvati by making her cut ties with her friends. But they are scared to lose the other daughter and they trying make sure that don't happen, but in the end they might cause more harm then good.

DrT posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:52pm for Goodbye My Love

"It has been pointed out to me that I sometimes have horrible things happen to Harry's girlfriends. I'm trying to stop doing that."

As I said when folks complained about what I did to Ron some times, it only works when we care for a character

Mikkun posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:49pm for Goodbye My Love

I think this should stand out on its own, maybe even incorporate a divergent path from Technomage. Nonetheless it's a good one-shot, if you look at it that way.

Can't wait to see Harry armored up to the wazoo in seventh year.

Clell65619 replied:

The Armor will show up in it's 1.0 version fourth year, though Harry will be testing a very important system when Neville comes to visit.

- The way I'm justifying Tony allowing Harry access to his tech is that Harry has to understand it and construct it himself before it's allowed, so the armor will come together slowly. Also the Technomagic will start showing up as he and his team get it working in the project.

stephen kempey posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:29pm for Goodbye My Love

only problem with this story is that while tony could leave all means of communication both fury and pepper would both be able to find him in hours if not sooner.