dwilken posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 7:05pm

Feeling a bit morose when you wrote this? Nicely done, but....

Clell65619 replied:

- No, not really. As I said in the A/N, I was looking for a way to drive Harry to the point where he will kill. Based on pre-reader reaction I decided to take the story in a fuzzier direction. Harry isn't going to kill, but many people will wish he had. But that's seventh year and the story is only up to midway through the second.

NWL posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 6:47pm

I liked what I saw - a lot - though the comments attached to the story left me with a question for you.

Almost every writer has what I call a "wombat place". I call it this after a colleague; every work he would write, even if it was meant to be dark or serious, would always end up in comedy within about 5-6 chapters. When things got silly, the wombats would come out. Thus, the story had gone to the wombat place.

The point of a wombat place is this: the story may start out quite different, but - unless they consciously try to avoid it - drifts over the course of chapters starts to drift to a certain point in a person's psyche. Some, like my old colleague, went to comedy; others, like myself, tended to go toward darker endings.

So... my question to you, given your issues with the original planned end of Technomage. What is your 'wombat place'? And what do you think about it?

Clell65619 replied:

- My writing is a fairly organic thing. When the actors start ad libbing in my head, when my prereaders make suggestions or point out my idiocy, the story mutates. I always start a new story with an outline. The outline rarely survives intact past the fifth chapter.

- Technomage is on it's seventh outline.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:56pm

It sad that Harry lost a close friend, I am surprise that Parvati Mum and Dad have forbidden her to spend time with her friends. I think that Harry is big part of why Parvati is forbidden, but I don't think that the Patil are trying to protect Parvati by making her cut ties with her friends. But they are scared to lose the other daughter and they trying make sure that don't happen, but in the end they might cause more harm then good.

DrT posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:52pm

"It has been pointed out to me that I sometimes have horrible things happen to Harry's girlfriends. I'm trying to stop doing that."

As I said when folks complained about what I did to Ron some times, it only works when we care for a character

Mikkun posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:49pm

I think this should stand out on its own, maybe even incorporate a divergent path from Technomage. Nonetheless it's a good one-shot, if you look at it that way.

Can't wait to see Harry armored up to the wazoo in seventh year.

Clell65619 replied:

The Armor will show up in it's 1.0 version fourth year, though Harry will be testing a very important system when Neville comes to visit.

- The way I'm justifying Tony allowing Harry access to his tech is that Harry has to understand it and construct it himself before it's allowed, so the armor will come together slowly. Also the Technomagic will start showing up as he and his team get it working in the project.

stephen kempey posted a comment on Thursday 4th March 2010 5:29pm

only problem with this story is that while tony could leave all means of communication both fury and pepper would both be able to find him in hours if not sooner.