jovan schnee posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2010 3:57pm
I am so pleased to see you on this site. Well deserved. I am a big fan of yours. I wanted you to know that this story is the one of your's that I enjoy most. The gender inversion really pumps in new life (no mean feat with over 100K stories on FFNET). I like your uses of for the ROR. Not over the top; original in ways that help to propel the story. The characters are good with emotions and responses that make sense. I was laughing out loud at the Thubbi's torment. Not fond of Madame Riddle's over the top killing sprees. It is seems a bit out of proportion to the the other things going on in the story. I understand that since she's not on stage very often you have to be pretty vivid when you show her to help maintain the tension stemming from the knowledge of what Harry and Harri will have to face. Instead of killing innocents however it might be better to show off how relatively more powerful she is than anyone else and/or how insanely devoted her followers might be. Then it becomes clear just how large a problem our heros have to overcome rather than just examples of shocking cruelty. However, in this is just a minor quibble in what otherwise is a fantastic tale. Can't wait to see how it finishes. (Please finish it).
Riegert8 posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2010 2:38pm
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Carol Layland posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2010 11:39am
A lovely chapter that is very well written. I very much enjoyed reading it. Thank you for the pleasure and I hope to read the next chapter soon.