Christopher Estep posted a comment on Friday 8th October 2010 3:38pm

Female version of the old Auror, Rufus Scrimgeour (recognized by her attitude, which I remember from Half-Baked Plot) tried am Umbridge. Major error, that; Harri has a protector who may not *like* what he has to do, but will do it anyway. Harry stole a page out of the Bully Humiliator's Handbook - make their first shot miss; don't give them a second shot (ever, if possible).

Damon Ring posted a comment on Wednesday 29th September 2010 10:18pm

I have only just logged back into this site in the first time in nearly six months and found this gem. I cannot praise this story enough, and old concept given a fresh set of legs,,,well done, keep up the good work!!

Sssith posted a comment on Wednesday 29th September 2010 10:27am

I've have been surprised at how much I have enjoyed your story. Given the theme I didn't expect it. Well done.

bookworm914 posted a comment on Sunday 26th September 2010 12:00pm

Really cool story, thanks for posting it.
The scene here with Umbridge got me a bit confused thinking about why he wasn't the appointed DADA instructor... in chapter 1 Harry calls attention to Moody; is that the point of divergence for the macro-political changes? Crouch captured, interrogated sooner than before, with less dementors present?
Anyway, I do notice some proofing errors as I go through - occasionally you use a gendered pronoun for the original rather than the switched character, sometimes words are out of order or a missing preposition, but nothing that interferes with comprehension. Awesome concept, really good execution so far, please keep it up. Thanks.

Clell65619 replied:

- My reasoning for Umbridge not coming to Hogwarts in the Fem universe is that there were three survivors of the night at the Graveyard, not one, and unlike Voldemort, The Dark Lady immediately started a campaign of terror.

- The Ministry had no reason to try and cover up the Dark Lady's return because they couldn't possibly do it.

- This story kills me, no matter how many times I go through each chapter some pronoun issues sneak through. In chapter fifteen, I had Orestes down as Hermione until the fifth draft.

brad posted a comment on Saturday 25th September 2010 4:53pm

Always good to see the "Lucius has to concede he is weak-minded to escape justice" riff, although yours/Harry's is one of the most detailed condemnations I've read to date. And, uh, the most unusual, in that Lucius is a woman. :-)

Always good, too, to see Draco / 'Thubani' (still can't get over the distaff name) get a good shock. I've very glad you had Harry remind us just how thoroughly *nasty* Draco/Thubani was back then, how he gloated over the death of Cedric, salivated over Hermione's fate under the Dark Lord and the rest. The scare she got in this chapter was well warranted! And that which her parents received even more so - seeing them attacked via their child was innovative and very satisfying. :-) Given as how they'd previously been rejoicing in how they'd torture the Potters.

> he suddenly moved and was behind the witch with her wand in his hand before Dumbledore could blink.

Yay! So Harry is now the master of the Elder Wand!!! :-)

Looking forward to the big battle when hopefully both Potters will kick arse and clobber the Dark Lord once and for all. It's a pity you've said they won't hop back to Harry's universe and deliver the same two-for-one deal to that plane's dark mage. Oh well.

Thank you for my Sunday brunch fanfic fodder!

Clell65619 replied:

- Abusing the Malfoys is its own reward, especially when you consider that they got off in canon... Again.

- No Hallows, deathly or otherwise were used in the construction of this fic. There is no 'Elder Wand' and I refuse to recognize that particular last minute plot device. Harriet has an Invisibility cloak, and it is special, but only because it was her Mother's, and I've pretty much dodged any useful application of the Resurrection Stone via the Room of Requirements. The Hallows being something that every Magical raised knows but never saw fit to mention before struck me as very Sluggy Freelance.

- No, Harry will not be returning to his home reality, but I have a sequel of sorts on the planning stage, tentatively titled: Neville Longbottom and the Spear Side.

selonianth posted a comment on Saturday 25th September 2010 11:14am

i like it. i like it very much.

dimriver posted a comment on Friday 24th September 2010 12:17am

A great story. You might consider instead of girls having misses and miss guys having mister and something else. Attack poodles hahaha. I'm picturing the little monsters going for the achilles tendon and then the throat after their prey falls.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 11:41pm

That was likely the best smack down of any version of Umbridge I've ever see. :-)

Good chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.

Brin_Londo5 posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 11:13pm

Loved the bit with the fake Malfoy head. Makes me almost wish it was the real thing, but then that'd make this a "Dark Harry" fic.
Plus, the mental bitch-slap to Fem!Dumbledore was great, too.

Snag posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 11:00pm

I've said it before, and I'll say it again - I do like this story. About the only thing I can say against this chapter is that there wasn't nearly enough interaction with Harry and Luna. He's gone and slipped into Ultra-Efficient Mode and hasn't had a chance to release some of that steam by being able to be normal. It seems to me that he should be starting to get a little stressed about now.

Clell65619 replied:

- This chapter was really more about Harriet than Harry, to be fair, it is her universe...

- Next chapter there will be some Luna/Harry time, but not too much, they are, after all, only 15.

Vyrexuviel posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 7:11pm

HOT DAMN!!!

GREAT chapter, and I bloody LOVE dumbledore's last line! ^.^ here's hoping you update this fic again soon!

Riegert8 posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 2:19pm

well written chapter

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 12:12pm

"I couldn’t leave her. Hell, I didn’t even know she was a she, I could barely see. Thanks for the glasses by the way." Harry watched a thestral flying over the forbidden forest. "My Granger always said I had a ‘saving people thing’."

He can't see them anymore?

Clell65619 replied:

Can't see what? Thestrals? Sure, he saw Cedric die prior to the transfer.

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 11:07am

Great update with a well written slap down of Umbridge by Harri and Fudge.

marcelhm posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 8:23am

beats me why but somehow I never read this story from you b4. and well what a mistake that turned out to be! :D

GZ man it was a ball.
M.

joeBob posted a comment on Thursday 23rd September 2010 12:41am

Entertaining chapter. Thanks for the update.

John Wilburn posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd September 2010 9:44pm

Clell,
I've been waiting for so long for this. Thank you, you did not disappoint. I really don't have a lot of consrtuctive criticism to impart,
I could'nt write something this entertaining if my life depended on it. So,therefore, I won't try.
Thank you,
John

Clell65619 replied:

- Thanks. Glad you like it.

deeniebee posted a comment on Monday 13th September 2010 12:15am

Hello!

I'm really liking this story =) The plot is original and the dialogue is fantastic. However, I'm finding that there are times when those you've designated as female are referred to as "he" and those designated as males are referred to as "she". It got really confusing and I almost didn't finish reading the chapters already up, mostly because trying to keep it straight was distracting me from the story and dialogue. I noticed it most in the last 2 chapters posted. Just something to keep in mind if you plan an revising or for future chapters. Other then that, I can't wait to see where you are going with this and if Harry returns to his own dimension!

CrimsonEmperor posted a comment on Wednesday 30th June 2010 11:51am

Lolz, I've passed this story so many times on ff.net... But sooo good. Brilliant story mate. I think the polarization of women and men on being the 'aggressive' gender was hilarious... I hope we see another chapter soon!

Clell65619 replied:

- working on it.

zArkham4269 posted a comment on Wednesday 19th May 2010 9:41am

One quick note, in the passage, "Harri immediately recognized them from the Mirror of Erised and the photo album she had gotten from Hagrid for Christmas first year." shouldn't Hagrid be replaced w/Ruebella since it is Harri that is remembering?

BTW, I really love this story; I've reread it a few times. It is in the top 3 of fanfics I hope are one day finished along with JBern's Turn Me Loose.

Clell65619 replied:

- No, both Rubeus and Ruebella Hagrid go by their surnames...