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yargew posted a comment on Monday 16th May 2016 12:08am

Fabulous. Great crossover and I really enjoy how you've woven the worlds together. You dialog is a jewel. Thanks for sharing! I hope to see more. T.G.H.

BAFan posted a comment on Friday 29th April 2016 4:24pm

Oh, very clever indeed!


BAFan posted a comment on Friday 29th April 2016 2:53pm

Stuart Granger? It took me a minute, but then I got it, lol. I love this work; it has humor and serious themes both.


Jonathan Langford posted a comment on Sunday 21st February 2016 11:19pm

It seems like Dumbledore is constantly pushing with regards to Harry -- with McGonagall as his willing accomplice. I'd really like to see some pushback on that, since it's my perception that the Dumbledore of this fiction is one who will just keep pushing until he is slapped down. (And then he'll wait a while and start again -- and need to be slapped down again.)

Lord_Tyriok posted a comment on Friday 19th February 2016 9:20pm

And once again, your heroes fail to make the point stick.

Snape is a bully, as are Dumbledore and McGonagall (in their own, inimitable fashions). The only way to make a bully back down is to show them the consequences of their bullying. Not vaguely worded threats and slight "parlor tricks" like speaking in their minds, but something that will stick. Abiity and training mean exactly nothing without the willingness to follow-through, the "will to act" as it were.

Don't get me wrong, I like the crossover elements of this story, and am a huge fan of random appearances by random characters (still laughing over Fin Fang Foom vaporizing Tony Stark's sinuses and the pinewood derby--two of my favorite moments) and the interpersonal interactions are great, until there is a conflict within the school .

Why is it that Harry Stark and company are perfectly willing to act when facing the Kree, or a mugger on the streets of New York or a troll, but are strangely incapable of simply showing the idiotic bullies in the school the consequences of their actions. The best way to handle Snape's mental probing is to slap him down with mental defenses. The best way to handle Snape's bullying is to slap him down with legal injunctions. The best way to stop Albus 'too-many-bloody-names' Dumbledore is to start with a 'cease-and-desist' order and a restraining order and ramp up from there.

Just because he has to be in Britain to minimize the loss of life when Voldy returns doesn't mean he has to put up with the Ministry's BS. He's got allies and friends of amazing powers that could show the British Wizarding World just how far out of its depth it's trying to compete, yet neither he, nor they, seem capable of acting on their new nemeses. How is this self-limitation going to help any if Voldy and the DEs take back over the Ministry before everyone gets their act together. In fact, if Stark is unwilling to show a known Death Eater (Snape) the consequences of his actions, then how is he going to be able to do so when it's another Death Eater (Lucius, Bellatrix, Rodolphus, Rookwood, etc.)? After all, it could still be Snape under the mask.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 12th February 2016 3:38pm

Very nice with Frank toward the end, though I thought Hermione was going with Hermione? And you never did identify Victor's date.

Hope Frank's actions don't blow up in anyone's face. Though defanging the blood-purists and tweaking AD, McG, and Snape's collective noses were amusing.

Looking forward to more.

Kairan1979 posted a comment on Friday 12th February 2016 9:24am

I think using the banner of Fin Fang Foom is a unique way to deal with the dragon.

Viktor turning out to be Doom's relative is a nice twist.

I especially liked Franklin's little show. It's always nice to see the arrogant purebloods forced to face reality.

Jonathan Langford posted a comment on Thursday 28th January 2016 9:26pm

Why is Dumbledore so intent on constantly controlling Harry? It's like he has no idea that he's continually shooting himself in the foot...

Very enjoyable chapter. I liked seeing Franklin as more than just the teenage idiot that he (like Harry) also is.

Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Thursday 28th January 2016 9:05am

WOOOOOT!! Franklin Richards 1 : 0 Blood Purists; TAKE THAT, you arrogant pure-blood racist bastards!!

GBTtown posted a comment on Monday 25th January 2016 12:55pm

Great chapter and update!

Jeremy DuCharme posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2016 6:46pm

Interesting. I'm surprised that Harry isn't having Boy Scouts flash backs. Him and Viktor Krum in the tourney is shaping up like Harry and Franklin at the Scout Pine Wood Derby.

That would make the budding love triangle of Franklin, Hermione, and Viktor the Regatta.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2016 5:32pm

I thought it was interesting how Harry got the egg, I think that Luna is a interesting character.

cmzanna posted a comment on Thursday 21st January 2016 7:58pm

I don't review nearly as often as I should, but I had to just say what a lift to my spirits it is when I see an update for this story! Thank you, thank you. I am thoroghly enjoying this, especially Harry's interactions with Dumbledoor, and Hermione's reactions to Harry's escapades. Franklin was deviously marvelous in this chapter as well!

mwinter posted a comment on Wednesday 20th January 2016 9:57pm

Cool awaiting more.

Hoss posted a comment on Thursday 24th December 2015 9:04pm

Thanks for the great christmas present. But a cliff hanger. Nuts.

Wanderer posted a comment on Monday 7th December 2015 2:32am

WOW, well that's a hard left turn! Voldiewhatsit should have been so lucky!

I had to look up the movie Misery jic 'Mavis' was the nurse from S Kings disturbing work, but alas, no such luck for the rat :)

Definitely a rough place to quit for now, but I look forward to catching up tomorrow and hope that you are back in fine writing form for the remainder of your very enjoyable tale! M

Wanderer posted a comment on Monday 7th December 2015 1:52am

" That was when Harry decided not to short sheet T'Challa's bed. " I Absolutely love Harry's Wisdom! :D

""As you command, so I will obey," she said, not feeling the slightest bit of remorse for lying to a dying man. "I will bind him to our family." " Oh crap I hope that wasn't magically binding! There was no telltale 'whoosh of magic', but I'm not sure if a family oath would produce the same effects. Crap, Tracey's wisdom is not so admirable as her heart :/

Wanderer posted a comment on Monday 7th December 2015 1:09am

Super fun chapter, moving things along at a good pace now, and mixing in lots of the (not-so) wonderful aspects of those early years lol M

Wanderer posted a comment on Monday 7th December 2015 12:05am

"So this visit would be to the New World?": Augusta Longbottom to perfection :)

"...You’re going to have to stalk and capture your mate just like everyone else.": Goblin executive to perfection :D

Fun chapter, filled with the broader scope of the characters, very nicely done. M

Wanderer posted a comment on Sunday 6th December 2015 11:35pm

"Ah, the rare Ravenclaw that questions the source materials." Xeno downed another drink. "What are you going to do Filius?"

The Charms Master refilled both glasses and sipped at his. "What are you going to do Xeno?"


One of my favorite things about this story is the dialogue. You don't take an overly large number of words to convey personality and drama.

I will admit that the time-jumps are a bit off, especially when they happen multiple time in the midst of a page without clear notice - that is frustrating. I don't want to guess when/who/what is going on as a general rule.

The exception was the Ginny/Luna swap - nicely done on that, never saw it coming :)

Thanks for the story, M