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Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Sunday 4th December 2011 2:27pm

Cribbing a bit from "Cary", are we? Still, 'twas an interesting bit and I have to love what Fleur did to Draco (I wonder how she'll react to Harry thanking with a present?). 'Twas an enjoyable Ball scene and you've worked in some very nice twists ('twill be most amusing to witness Ron's "reactions" and see him get smacked down by Harry and everyone else). I can help but wonder if there's another Malfoy named "Lucius" nearby in the family tree who could be Draco's real father (it would explain much). I could just see *this* Lucius letting down his guard on his wedding night, getting too drunk to "perform", and being replaced by the other one so that Narcissa could enjoy the night.

Clell65619 replied:

- Just a bit from Carrie, yeah. I just asked myself what could Draco do that could possibly cause Fleur to deploy her 'nuclear option'... And the vat of blood seemed to fit.

- Damn it Evan. I want to go on record for pointing out that I have already written the scene where the memory of Lucius' rogue ne'r-do-well uncle 'Slappy' Malfoy is recalled.

Matthew Blair posted a comment on Sunday 4th December 2011 11:57am

I like that fact that Lucius is almost a likeable character in this. It is a nice change from the usual evil conniving bastard.

XRaiderV1 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 3:38pm

outstanding work.

happyreader posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 11:48am

thank you,,,,, your story ideas continue to amaze and amuse me.
bye........ happyreader

Rage and Light posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 11:30am

This is a great story and I am enjoying it very much, what happened to Malfoy was funny and I am curious as to Lucius's rather tame response, and what was that spell he kept trying to cast? I hope to see more soon

david

Katsuhito posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 11:02am

This is a neat story - very amusing. I do hope, though, that Draco learns his lesson and becomes at least slightly less useless. I'm all for Malfoy bashing, but I never thought of him as stupid. (Maybe not smart, but not dumb either - at least average IQ.)

Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter, just like many of your other works. <nudge nudge> :)

loiosh posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 10:17am

love this story!

Samantha posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 9:50am

Well done. I laughed the whole way through the first two chapters. Looking forward to more.

Thalia posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 9:12am

Ha, the pleasure of changed little things and consequences... most of all, the pleasures of rocks in ponds and their waves :D
And don't think I didn't catch the implications of Draco being willing to make Pottah pay! :p
Only one thing left to say: more, more, more!

Thanks,

Nathalie

DrT posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 9:05am

quote: "Harry sighed. It always seemed like he was the only one with no clue as to what was going on." Yep, that's canon at least (as is Draco's stupidity, IMO)! and good use of Dean, btw.

Gaelyn posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 5:28am

One of these times....Lucius will get lucky. It'll say something like, "Gilderoy Lockhart" on it. Maybe after Draco "stumbles" on him at the hospital. That would explain so much.

Great chapter! I am looking forward to the next installment.

Patches posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 2:37am

This is excellent. I love the changes you made for the ball lineup. Hermione going with Cedric was great. Susan asking Harry was cute. I love the way that Harry stumbled through that. Cho going with Krum was really different. I can't imagine her giving up Cedric for Krum but she did like high profile men. You can't beat the best professional seeker in the league. Cedric is nice. I liked the way he talked to Harry. Harry warning Cedric was very appropriate. I liked Cedric's reaction. The cunning surprise Draco pulled was really stupid. Especially when he did it wrong and in front of all the wrong people. I can't blame Lucius for questioning if Draco is really his son. Draco hasn't learned a thing though. He still blames Harry for what happened to him. All because Draco missed his target. I look forward to more of this story. pms

Fic Chick posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 1:57am

I enjoyed this chapter, although I do question the believability of Ron being familiar with the term, wingman.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 12:51am

Good chapter

Full_Pensieve posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 12:06am

Dress robes that look like Regency-era draperies mothballed for a century? Ten Knuts.

Dr. Glossolalia's Kwik-Speak French lessons, so you can understand every word when Fleur Delacour figuratively defenestrates you? Two Galleons and nine Sickles.

Neville Longbottom telling you you're a wally? Priceless. :D

Cheers,
Mike [FP]

Clell65619 replied:

- Hey, Neville's the Man! As a Tee Shirt I have so proudly states "Neville could have gotten it done in 4 books"

- The next chapter of Technomage will offer a look at the Longbottoms not often shown.

Full_Pensieve posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2011 12:03am

So many tasty tidbits to choose from, but still there's a hands-down winner. In a single paragraph of interior monologue, you managed to conjure up at least four completely cringeworthy ideas about Mad-Eye Moody. I salute you! ;)

Cheers,
Mike [FP]

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 2nd December 2011 10:28pm

Good chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 2nd December 2011 12:16am

This is fun. Thanks for writing. W.

rajvir posted a comment on Thursday 1st December 2011 6:14pm

hmm I have already read this at fanfiction but I am not sure if I left a review just in case I have not great story.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Thursday 1st December 2011 6:03pm

Funny that Draco lost so much money to bet, It rare to find a story that Draco make a bet. This is my second story where Draco lose a bet, the first story Draco bet Harry that his mother and Bellatrix would marry Harry if Draco lose the bet. To make a long story short by the time Draco lost the bet Harry end up with more then 50 wives, so I like your story better